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The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.
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The given tables show the data about the temperatures and hours of day time in the same three days of December 2018, in
London
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 and
Sydney
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. The units were measured in
celsius
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Celsius
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 and the information on both tables consisted of
temperature
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, time of
sunrise
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 and
sunset
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, and the date.
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, it can be clearly seen that
daytimetime
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daytime time
daytime-time
 in
Sydney
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 was longer than in
London
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.
Thus
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, it was impacted by the
temperature
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, that
Sydney
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 was warmer than
London
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 on all three days. In terms of the city of
London
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, on all given days,
sunrise
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 and
sunset
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 times only have a 1 - 2 minutes difference,
sunrise
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 at 08:06 and
sunset
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 at 15:58. Because of the short day time, the higher
temperature
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 only reach maximum in 13
degree
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celcius
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 on Sunday 29th,
whereas
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 the lowest
temperature
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also
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 in the same date in 3
degree
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celcius
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. Meanwhile in the city of
Sydney
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, the day light was longer than in
London
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.
Sunrise
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 was start at 05:45 and
sunset
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 at 20:07.
As a result
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, the
temperature
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 was more hotter with the higher
temperature
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 in 31
degree
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celcius
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 on Sunday 30th and the lowest
temperature
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 in 17
degree
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celcius
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 on Friday 28th.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, sydney, temperature, sunrise, sunset, degree, celcius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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