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The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.
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The given tables show the data about the temperatures and hours of day time in the same three days of December 2018, in
London
 and
Sydney
. The units were measured in
celsius
Capitalize word
Celsius
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 and the information on both tables consisted of
temperature
, time of
sunrise
 and
sunset
, and the date.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
daytimetime
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daytime time
daytime-time
 in
Sydney
 was longer than in
London
.
Thus
, it was impacted by the
temperature
, that
Sydney
 was warmer than
London
 on all three days. In terms of the city of
London
, on all given days,
sunrise
 and
sunset
 times only have a 1 - 2 minutes difference,
sunrise
 at 08:06 and
sunset
 at 15:58. Because of the short day time, the higher
temperature
 only reach maximum in 13
degree
celcius
 on Sunday 29th,
whereas
 the lowest
temperature
also
 in the same date in 3
degree
celcius
. Meanwhile in the city of
Sydney
, the day light was longer than in
London
.
Sunrise
 was start at 05:45 and
sunset
 at 20:07.
As a result
, the
temperature
 was more hotter with the higher
temperature
 in 31
degree
celcius
 on Sunday 30th and the lowest
temperature
 in 17
degree
celcius
 on Friday 28th.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, sydney, temperature, sunrise, sunset, degree, celcius with synonyms.
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