IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

In many countries today,parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co educational schools. Some people think that children going to to single sex schools have disadvantages latter in life. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In
this
Linking Words
 modern world, selecting an accurate place for education is a matter of concern. Whether to select a
same
Add a hyphen
same-sex
show examples
sex
Use synonyms
insitute
Correct your spelling
institute
 or
both
Use synonyms
 gender
netural
Correct your spelling
natural
neutral
places
Use synonyms
 is a decision of caregivers in many nations.
However
Linking Words
, many notions opine that deciding
a
Change preposition
on a
show examples
single
Add a hyphen
single-sex
show examples
sex
Use synonyms
schools
Change the noun form
school
show examples
 leads to many hurdles in the life of
childrens
Correct your spelling
children
' when they
went
Wrong verb form
go
show examples
 to colleges and workplaces. I
also
Linking Words
 concur with
this
Linking Words
 phenomenon. The first reason behind my belief is the lack of cooperation.
For example
Linking Words
, many jobs are handled by
both
Use synonyms
 men and women. From a study, it is seen that people who studied in
one
Add a hyphen
one-sex
show examples
sex
Use synonyms
 schools
trust
Use synonyms
 the same
sex
Use synonyms
 more as compared to others. The reason is clear because they were not familiar with
opposite
Add an article
the opposite
show examples
sex
Use synonyms
 during their initial days.
Thus
Linking Words
, it will impact the workflow
as well as
Linking Words
output
Correct article usage
the output
show examples
 of
both
Use synonyms
employee
Fix the agreement mistake
employees
show examples
 and employers.
In addition
Linking Words
 to
it
Correct pronoun usage
this
show examples
, they may face competition in
latter
Correct your spelling
later
show examples
 life. These days females and
mens
Correct your spelling
men
show examples
 can perform
task
Fix the agreement mistake
tasks
show examples
 without any gender
discrimation
Correct your spelling
discrimination
.
Mens
Correct your spelling
Men
show examples
 are
also
Linking Words
 seen in culinary activities. If they lose to study together they will not be aware of the amount of
competiton
Correct your spelling
competition
 they can receive from
womens
Correct your spelling
women
show examples
.
The another
Remove the article
Another
show examples
 reason is
trust
Use synonyms
 issues may enter into the life. From education
Use synonyms
places
Add a comma
places,
show examples
 juveniles can learn to
trust
Use synonyms
 each
others
Change to a singular noun
other
show examples
.
For instance
Linking Words
, girls are abused by many boys sexually and mentally after they
got
Wrong verb form
get
show examples
 married especially in India. Many girls are
affraid
Correct your spelling
afraid
 to marry a guy because they do not know how men can handle them
due to
Linking Words
 the same
sex
Use synonyms
places
Use synonyms
. It will result
into
Change preposition
in
show examples
lower
Add an article
the lower
a lower
show examples
 level of
trust
Use synonyms
.
Additionally
Linking Words
, they may
Add a missing verb
be affraid
show examples
affraid
Correct your spelling
afraid
 to talk and sit with strangers owing to the news about rapes and
murdered
Replace the word
murders
show examples
 of girls. In conclusion, parents have
right
Correct article usage
the right
show examples
 to decide the starting schooling based on
preference
Add an article
the preference
show examples
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
same
Add a hyphen
same-sex
show examples
sex
Use synonyms
 or
both
Use synonyms
.
However
Linking Words
, one
sex
Use synonyms
 education place
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
 many issues.
Moreover
Linking Words
, I firmly believe that
childern
Correct your spelling
children
 should have
right
Correct article usage
the right
show examples
 to study in
co educational
Add a hyphen
co-educational
show examples
places
Use synonyms
 so that they can know the cooperation, how to work with each other and how to
trust
Use synonyms
 all.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Your essay partially addresses the prompt, but there is room for improvement in fully responding to the question's extent. Make sure to provide a balanced discussion, consider both sides of the argument if applicable, and conclude with a clear opinion to enhance task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Structurally, the essay requires better organization and logical sequencing to improve coherence. Transitions between ideas should be smoother, and linking words should be employed accurately to guide the reader through your argument. Cohesion can be enhanced by making sure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • single-sex schools
  • co-educational schools
  • academic focus
  • distractions
  • socialization
  • peer pressure
  • soft skills
  • parental guidance
  • career success
  • gender-stereotyped activities
  • personal development
  • cultural norms
  • adolescence
  • identity formation
  • long-term success
  • societal influence
What to do next:
Look at other essays: