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map that show teh difference in the construction of city

map that show teh difference in the construction of city
The two maps illustrate the difference in an unspecified
area
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 between 1995 and the present.
Overall
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, there was a considerable reduction in the green areas and
sport
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sports
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 facilities replaced them.
In addition
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, the number of houses has increased,
along with
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 the
demolision
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demolition
 of
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fish
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the fish
a fish
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market
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markets
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 and
building
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the building
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new
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of new
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 apartments on the beach.
To begin
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, in 1995, there was a housing
area
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in
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on
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 the northwestern
side
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 of the map on both sides of the street, beside which a housing complex on the western
side
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 of the
road
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 was
also
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 noted. What is more,
a
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farmland was spotted in the most northeastern point on the opposite
side
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 of the housing
area
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. Beside the farmland, there was
also
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 a forest park. Moving down the street
in
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on
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 the southern
side
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, there will be an intersection and on the
right
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 corner there was a
hotel
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, and on the opposite
side
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 of the
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road
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road,
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 there was
also
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 a cafe close to the sea.
In addition
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,
in
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on
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 the western
side
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 of the
hotel
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, shops were observed on the
right
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side
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 of the
road
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, and a
fish
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market
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 on the opposite
side
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 of it was
also
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 noted. Next to the
fish
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market
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, there was a fishing port on the southern
side
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in
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of
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 the sea.
By contrast
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, in present, the housing
area
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 was extended, and
right
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 above the housing complex, a new
road
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 was built which has
also
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 houses around. The forest was removed, and the farmland was extended
in
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to
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 the southern
side
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.
However
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, the land is used for golf and as a tennis court. Moving down the
road
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, it is noted that there is a new car park on the
right
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side
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 of the
hotel
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.
Moreover
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, on the western
side
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 of the
hotel
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, the shops were replaced by
resturants
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restaurants
, newly-built apartments overtook the
fish
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market
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, and the fishing port was completely demolished.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, in addition".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, fish, market, side, road, right, hotel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "difference" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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