Email is a fast and convenient way to communicate, and written letters aren’t needed anymore. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the modern world, digital communication
is
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impact
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to
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ours
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our
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life
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.
this
impact
also
encourage
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encourages
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people
to improve their knowledge of digitalization.Some
people
suggest that written letters
is
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are
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the best way to communicate.
However
,
while
I understand
this
viewpoint, I personally agree with
this
viewpoint.
To begin
with,the major concern of communication
that
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is communication speed because
this
is the main
keypoint
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key point
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for
select
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selecting
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the
communicate
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communication
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method.
Also
nowadays many
people
use the technology
call
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called
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Email
for
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to
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communicate
each
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with each
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others
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other
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.
Furthermore
,
Email
cost is free. Which is in every industry
are
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use
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used
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for
communicate
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communication
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. In the jobs market,
human
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the human
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resource department (HRD)
are choose
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chooses
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applicant
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applicants
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from the
email
that they send for applied jobs.
In
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view point
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the viewpoint
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of
HRD
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HRD,
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they
paticipate
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participate
with many
email
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emails
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more than
the
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apply
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paper
applicattion
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applications
.
In addition
in
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apply
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the
email
function
that
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apply
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can
adding
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add
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file
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files
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or
document
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documents
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to the
email
.
Moreover
,
email
can remember
context
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the context
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that you create and recheck before
send
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sending
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to other
people
. In conclusion,I strongly believe that
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, from my
perspective
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perspective,
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digitalization must disrupt
the
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apply
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traditional life or traditional work.So every
people
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person
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should improve
digital
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their digital
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skills.
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