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The given chart shows the number of immigration and emigration in the UK from 1999 to 2008.

The given chart shows the number of immigration and emigration in the UK from 1999 to 2008.
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The presented graph delineates the number of people migrating from and to The United Kingdom between 1999 and 2008. In general, it is conspicuous that both
immigration
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 and
emigration
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 increased in the time frame.
In addition
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, the highest spread between
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 and
emigration
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occured
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occurred
 in 2004. Turning to
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 and
emigration
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, these categories relatively had
a
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 same upward trend in 10 years.
Firstly
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, in the
beginning
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 period, people embarked to The United Kingdom
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300 thousand,
however
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, just beyond 400.000 individuals moved to other countries.
Then
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, in 2005. the number of
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 rose significantly and reached a peak at just
beneath
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 600.000.
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,
emmigration
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immigration
emigration
 experienced a slight increase.
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,
the
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 rest of
periods
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the periods
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, when
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 continued soaring until 2008,
the
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immigration
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unchanged
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. As regards the spread, it started
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well across 100.000 and remained the same until 2023. An
in
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interesting point is that
this
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 number skyrocketed and touched at a climax point at around 200.000 in 2004. After that, it declined by 100.000 people in the following year before recovering
at
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 well
avove
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above
 200.000
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 the end of the observed year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words immigration, emigration with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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