The given chart shows the number of immigration and emigration in the UK from 1999 to 2008.

The presented graph delineates the number of people migrating from and to The United Kingdom between 1999 and 2008. In general, it is conspicuous that both

immigration

and

emigration

increased in the time frame.

In addition

, the highest spread between

immigration

and

emigration

occured

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occurred

in 2004. Turning to

immigration

and

emigration

, these categories relatively had

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the

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same upward trend in 10 years.

Firstly

, in the

beginning

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beginning,

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period, people embarked to The United Kingdom

around

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apply

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300 thousand,

however

, just beyond 400.000 individuals moved to other countries.

Then

, in 2005. the number of

immigration

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immigrants

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rose significantly and reached a peak at just

beneath

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below

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600.000.

Likewise

emmigration

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immigration

emigration

experienced a slight increase.

Furthermore

the

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for the

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rest of

periods

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the periods

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, when

emigration

continued soaring until 2008,

the

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apply

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immigration

unchanged

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was unchanged

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. As regards the spread, it started

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apply

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well across 100.000 and remained the same until 2023. An

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apply

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interesting point is that

this

number skyrocketed and touched at a climax point at around 200.000 in 2004. After that, it declined by 100.000 people in the following year before recovering

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well

avove

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above

200.000

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the end of the observed year.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

182 words

6.50

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