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The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 map examines the possibility of a new supermarket in Pellington which has 120,000
of
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citizens. Those three sites
divided
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in
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 various
zone
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 which have
its
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their
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 own uniqueness and different surroundings. The C location is placed in the western part, which is in the southeast of the only airport in Pellington to be exact. More than that, it is
also
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 located
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the near of
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residential
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 the industrial field with a
nerby
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nearby
 railway passing through there.
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, A location is in the middle of
housing
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 area,
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 with C and B where
there
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 are in the countryside.
This
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 position is situated in the northwest of
traffic-free
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the traffic-free
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 zone which allows the planned spot
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becomes
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 strategic. Not only that, the A spot is the nearest one from another region which only
take
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 15km to get there.
This
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 shows that the supermarket not only aims for the local customer
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 but
also
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 individuals come from outside
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Pellington. In opposite
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those two planned spot
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that two planned spot
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, the B area is placed in the northeast of the field with no iconic place at all.
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, not like the A and C, B location is the only one
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 planned to have it closely situated with the motorway.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proposed sites
  • supermarket
  • locations
  • central
  • outskirts
  • residential areas
  • transport hubs
  • proximity
  • major roads
  • landmarks
  • accessibility
  • competition
  • shopping district
  • industrial area
  • green spaces
  • logistic ease
  • isolated
  • densely populated
  • traffic
  • customer reach
  • expansion possibilities
  • accessibility
  • customer base
  • logistical convenience
  • recommend
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