The chart below gives information on the average cost of a monthly plan from four different mobile phone providers in a European country, between January and September 2012, measured in euros.

The chart below gives information on the average cost of a monthly plan from four different mobile phone providers in a European country, between January and September 2012, measured in euros.
The line graph illustrates the average fee of monthly mobile plans for four different types of cellular companies in a European country from
January
to September 2012.
Overall
, all mobile phone providers' costs experienced an upward trend except Sim Tx.
Also
, the Alpha was the least popular provider at the beginning of the period and it became the most popular one
at the end
. In terms of, Provider Demo,
initially
there was an upward trend from
January
to July at about 15 to 25 respectively. In between these two months, it had some fluctuations and
at the end
, it was about 24 as the lowest cost.
In addition
to that,
the
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rose
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its cost gradually until September approximately from 12 to 17
while
Alpha
has
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moderate growth from
January
at about 5 to 6 and
then
dropped slightly to its initial value
on
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month
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of June.
However
, after June it significantly increased to the high point outraced Demo
at the end
. The figure Sim Tx, in
January
, spent around 9 Euros and
then
rose marginally to around 14 with some fluctuations during 5 months and after June plummeted to approximately 8 in September.
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