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Your friend invited you to his/her party, but you are unable to attend.Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •explain why you cannot come• give your reason for not contacting your friend sooner •suggest another time to meet

#friend #party #•explain #come• #reason #•suggest #time
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Dear Sara, I wanted to let you know that I am not attending your birthday party
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 some reason and I apologize for
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. I want to attend your birthday event, but my situation will not allow me to attend it. Yesterday, I
have
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suddenly received a call from my grandfather, and he told me that granny slipped from the staircase. What's more, she got hospitalized as her arm was severely injured,So, I had to go there in the evening.
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 my grandfather is there with my grandmother, he cannot handle all these things alone. My grandparents are residing in the countryside area, so the signal network of
this
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 area is very low. That's why I am unable to contact you in
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 regard early.
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, I wish you a happy birthday through
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 letter because I have no other option than to contact you. I'm sorry once again, and could you please tell me when you are available
after
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this
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 week
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 I would like to go to the dinner party as I am on
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holiday from next week when I come back to Delhi. I hope you will understand my situation. I'm looking forward to seeing you. Best regards, Rupi
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the greeting and closing are appropriate for the letter format and the level of formality required for the task.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a logical structure throughout the letter, and consider organizing the content into distinct paragraphs to enhance coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely and to enhance the overall quality of the letter.
grammatical range
Pay attention to the accurate use of verb tenses, punctuation, and sentence structures to ensure clarity and grammatical accuracy.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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