The chart below show the the information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.

The chart below show the the information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.
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The line chart illustrates the amount of gym membership of each gender from 1980 to 2010. The numbers of both male and female members fluctuated during
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time. During the majority of the time, the total membership in men had an overwhelming advantage compared to it in women.
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, the figure for male membership peaked at 5,000 and was twice as large as that of females around 2005. The number of men participating in the gym started rising from 2,000 and reached the top at 4,000 in 1985.
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, the number began to fall and reached its bottom at approximately 1,600 in 1995, after which the figure wavered between 500 and 5,000 until 2010. Moving forward to women's participation, the diagram showed a growing trend from 1980 to 2007.
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some decline appeared in 1990 and 2001, the total number of members still increased.
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, the format demonstrates that women have a preference for exercising nowadays, but men seemingly have lost their dominant status in the gym.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart, line graph, bar chart
  • depicts, shows, represents
  • male and female gym membership
  • 30-year period
  • significant increase/decrease
  • stable period, plateau
  • trends and patterns
  • compared to, in contrast with
  • rising trend, upward trajectory
  • plummeted, declined sharply
  • remained steady, fluctuated slightly
  • widened gap, narrowing gap
  • membership figures, subscription rates
  • peaked, reached a high
  • bottomed out, reached a low
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