Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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region
like India. Often poor land Fix the agreement mistake
regions
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problems
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politicians
. Sometimes, all these Correct word choice
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problems
with overpopulation Use synonyms
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with the economy and after that with Use synonyms
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, I believe that just financial aid will not help Linking Words
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solve all Correct word choice
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problems
. Some lands have poverty Use synonyms
problems
caused by not enough educational level, many kids in Use synonyms
countries
like that do not know what is school. I think that not just other Use synonyms
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but also
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UNESCO and the United Nations. These companies have a really big impact on the educational and cultural sphere worldwide. They should build just one or two schools per city in poor Change preposition
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i believe that these lands have issues with health Linking Words
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they do not have hospitals or doctors. In my opinion, worldwide organisations have to solve Linking Words
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one because they have enough money, people and influence for other Linking Words
countries
.
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important
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to nations, to people and just after that to governments. Linking Words
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, now people have advanced technologies to do everything online, so everybody who has a credit card can donate money to world organisations which will make our world better and healthier for all of us.Linking Words
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task achievement
Your introduction should more directly address the prompt by stating if you agree or disagree with the assertion that developed countries should provide non-financial aid rather than financial assistance.
task achievement
The body paragraphs should contain clear topic sentences that relate to the main idea introduced in the essay, as well as specific examples that support your stance.
task achievement
Ensure that you develop your arguments fully by explaining how and why non-financial aid can be more beneficial than financial aid, thereby directly addressing the essay question.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Transitions can help clarify the relationships between your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Your essay requires a more clear and coherent structure. Each paragraph should have a clear central idea, and all sentences should contribute to that idea.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices (e.g., conjunctions, lexical phrases) to improve the readability and organization of your essay.