The chart below show the the information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.
the line chart gives us information about men and women who
they
were membership in Correct pronoun usage
apply
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gym
.Add an article
a gym
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overall
it can be seen that the Capitalize word
Overall
number
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women
who enrolled in Change preposition
of women
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gym
increased steadily over the Add an article
the gym
period
,Use synonyms
although
the Linking Words
number
ofUse synonyms
boys
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boys'
boy's
membership
declined dramatically .
refers to Fix the agreement mistake
memberships
ladys
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ladys'
lady's
participate
, Replace the word
participation
in1980
saw amount of female participants stoot at 1000 members which was less than boys Correct your spelling
in 1980
participant
. after the following 5 Fix the agreement mistake
participants
years
the Add a comma
years,
number
of women who went to Use synonyms
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gym
jumped from 1000 to well -over 2000 members and Correct article usage
the gym
also
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were
some fluctuation during Change the verb form
was
this
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period
.after the following yearsUse synonyms
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,
this
level dropped significantly to Linking Words
finesh
at just under 2000 Correct your spelling
finish
memers
.
regardingCorrect your spelling
meters
members
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a
the
number
of men that they Use synonyms
interested
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are interested
to went
to Change preposition
in going
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gym
rose quickly from 2000 in 1980 to around 4000 in 1985 , during the Correct article usage
the gym
period
1990 to 1995Use synonyms
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the
number
of Use synonyms
man
membership fell suddenly . even though in 2005 Fix the agreement mistake
men
this
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number
peaked at 5000 members which was the highest Use synonyms
numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
man
who participated in fitness . butFix the agreement mistake
men
boys
memberships Change noun form
boys'
boy's
were
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apply
sharp
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sharply
decraese
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decreased
at the end
of the Linking Words
period
in 2010 .Use synonyms
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