The chart below shows the number of computers sold at three conputer stores in Ho Chi Minh city between 2000 and 2005.

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The given line chart gives information about how many

computers

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were sold at three different electronic stores during

five

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years

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five-year

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period in Ho Chi Minh City. Looking from an

overall

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perspective, it can be seen that the sales of

computers

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in Computer Plus and Laptop Word experienced fluctuation between 2000 and 2005. On the other side, there was an increase in the number of

computers

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sold in The Tech Guys store. Looking in more detail, in 2000 Computer Plus sold about 4000

computers

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compared to nearly 4500 items for The Tech Guys and approximately 8000

computers

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for Laptop World. From 2001 until 2002, The Tech Guys and Computer Plus sales increased

with

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the

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Laptop World sales remained stable for

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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The chart below shows the number of computers sold at three conputer stores in Ho Chi Minh city between 2000 and 2005.

Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own answers.

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