the map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.

the map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.
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the maps give us information about development in the bookstore in 2000 and recent time ,
overall
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it can be seen that the noticeable change is the
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replacement
at the top of
plan
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which they add  more subjects . refers to bookstore in 2000, at the right of the
plan
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there was a
fiction
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room
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where was joined with a nother big
fiction
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room
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at the top of the map ,
by contrast
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at the bottoom of the
plan
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there was non-
fiction
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and
service
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desk at the left corner ,moreoverat the middle of the map there were cookery,hobbes
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art rooms where was located infront of the
fiction
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room
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.futhermore travel
service
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and one
room
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for new book have constructed behind
service
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desk .
this
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paln has being developed now , they are going to relocate the cookery ,hobbies.
also
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art
room
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from ot the middel of the bookstore to top of the map
however
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, size of
room
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fiction
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will be smaller
then
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the size of it in 2000.
instead
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rooms that they are shifting they put tables at the middle . another change has being done in the bottom of the
plan
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which they are add cafe next to desk
service
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which remain at the same place , new books
room
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and travel
room
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as
such
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reamin unchanged .
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words plan, fiction, room, service with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • depicts
  • changes
  • occurred
  • transformations
  • developments
  • span
  • visual
  • comparison
  • illustrates
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