The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.
The pie charts give information regarding people's
reason
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reasons
to go
to work by Change preposition
for going
bicycle
or by car
. Overall
, both cycling and driving is
dominated by five reasons.
Change the verb form
are
Majority
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The majority
people
decide to go to work by Change preposition
of people
bicycle
because it can train
health and fitness and potentially less air Verb problem
improve
polution
than driving by Correct your spelling
pollution
car
. Some of them about 15% also
assumed that cycling did not require cost. In addition
, working with bicycle
mode did not lead parking
problems when they Change preposition
to parking
want
to put their Wrong verb form
wanted
bicycle
. 12% of individuals think that cycling did
not need more timeWrong verb form
does
,
because it is faster than driving by Remove the comma
apply
car
.
In contrast
, mostly
people choose to drive by Correct your spelling
most
car
at work because they feel comfortable. It is also
strengthened by the distance between house
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a house
the house
that is
so far with
the office where they do Change preposition
from
occupation
. About 14% Add an article
the occupation
individuals
opine driving is Change preposition
of individuals
the
good way to carry many Correct article usage
a
stuffs
at Change the wording
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
workplace
, Add an article
the workplace
whereas
another 14% think that driving by car
is faster to arrive at office
than cycling. Add an article
the office
Lastly
, the remaining 13% assumed that car
guarantee more safety than Fix the agreement mistake
cars
bicycle
.Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bicycle, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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