The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.

#people #travel #work #bicycle #car

The pie charts give information regarding people's

reason

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reasons

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to go

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for going

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to work by

bicycle

or by

car

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, both cycling and driving

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are

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dominated by five reasons.

Majority

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The majority

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people

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of people

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decide to go to work by

bicycle

because it can

train

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health and fitness and potentially less air

polution

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pollution

than driving by

car

. Some of them about 15%

also

assumed that cycling did not require cost.

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, working with

bicycle

mode did not lead

parking

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problems when they

want

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wanted

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to put their

bicycle

. 12% of individuals think that cycling

did

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not need more time

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because it is faster than driving by

car

In contrast

mostly

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most

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people choose to drive by

car

at work because they feel comfortable. It is

also

strengthened by the distance between

house

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a house

the house

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that is

so far

with

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from

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the office where they do

occupation

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the occupation

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. About 14%

individuals

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opine driving is

the

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good way to carry many

stuffs

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kinds of stuff

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workplace

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the workplace

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whereas

another 14% think that driving by

car

is faster to arrive at

office

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the office

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than cycling.

Lastly

, the remaining 13% assumed that

car

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cars

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guarantee more safety than

bicycle

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bicycles

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words bicycle, car with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

180 words

6.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.

The avarage standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future now. to what extend do you agree or dis agree with this statement?

EXPERTS SAY IF OLDER PEOPLE SPEND THEIR TIME WITH OTHER PEOPLE AND EXERCISE DAILY THEIR LIVES WILL BE HAPPIER AND HEALTHIER. HOWEVER MANY ELDERLY ARE SUFFERING FROM LACK OF FITNESS. DISCUSS CAUSE AND SOLUTION.

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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