The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.

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The pie charts give information regarding people's

reason

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reasons

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to go

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for going

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to work by

bicycle

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or by

car

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Overall

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, both cycling and driving

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are

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dominated by five reasons.

Majority

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The majority

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people

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of people

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decide to go to work by

bicycle

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because it can

train

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improve

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health and fitness and potentially less air

polution

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pollution

than driving by

car

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. Some of them about 15%

also

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assumed that cycling did not require cost.

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, working with

bicycle

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mode did not lead

parking

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to parking

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problems when they

want

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wanted

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to put their

bicycle

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. 12% of individuals think that cycling

did

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does

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not need more time

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apply

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because it is faster than driving by

car

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In contrast

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mostly

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most

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people choose to drive by

car

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at work because they feel comfortable. It is

also

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strengthened by the distance between

house

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a house

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that is

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so far

with

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from

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the office where they do

occupation

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the occupation

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. About 14%

individuals

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of individuals

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opine driving is

the

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good way to carry many

stuffs

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kinds of stuff

pieces of stuff

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workplace

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the workplace

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whereas

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another 14% think that driving by

car

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is faster to arrive at

office

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the office

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than cycling.

Lastly

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, the remaining 13% assumed that

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car

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cars

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guarantee more safety than

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bicycle

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bicycles

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Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on Fri Jan 12 2024

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words bicycle, car with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

180 words

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