The chart below shows the average cost of monthly contract for four different mobile (cell phones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro. Write at least 150 words.
The line graph illustrates the
amoun
of money per month for contracts Correct your spelling
amount
four
different mobile in a European country over the Change preposition
for four
nine months
period in 2002, calculated in Correct your spelling
nine-month
euro
.
From Fix the agreement mistake
euros
overall
perspective, Add an article
an overall
it is clear that
in January cell phone Domo had the highest average cost
of monthly contract
, Fix the agreement mistake
contracts
while
in September
the patterns of Alpha figure
extremely increased.
Look at the graph for more detail, it is clear that
in January the average cost
of monthly
contract for Domo was 15, Add an article
the monthly
a monthly
however
by September
the figure
had risen to approximately 25. In contrast
, the figure
of
Alpha cell Change preposition
for
phone
was 5, Fix the agreement mistake
phones
nevertheless
in September
the figure
experienced a significant rise to 25, there was near fivefold increase,
Furthermore
, the cost
for Sim TX fluctuated between 7 and 13, therefore
did not witnessed
Change the verb form
witness
dramatical
changes. The Replace the word
dramatic
figure
of
Lex phone saw the lowest average Change preposition
for
cost
in February, despite this
until September
slightly increased to 17.Submitted by hebibli.eli on
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