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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.
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number
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 of workers in countries
such
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new zealand
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New Zealand
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,
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the united
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united kingdom
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United Kingdom
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,Australia ,United States from 2003 to 2006 and out of a total of 1,000
people
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 in 2006 New Zealand's
number
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 of
migrants
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 since 2003 is not too many with a
number
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 of 65,000
people
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. But in 2006, it increased a lot with
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number
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 of
people
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 of 87,000 and
also
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 in 2006, the total
number
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 of workers over 1,000
people
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 was 21.1 . Next came
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the United States in 2003 a significant total
number
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 of
migrants
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 with a
number
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 of 577,000, and in 2006 the
number
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 of
people
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 was 678,000 and in that year the total
number
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 of
migrants
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 was over 1,000
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2,3 And
finally
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, the total recount of the
number
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 of
migrants
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of
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from
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 each country in 3 years

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, migrants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 10 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Temporary migrant workers
  • Labor mobility
  • Statistical data
  • Insights
  • Trends
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Economic growth
  • Demand for labor
  • Immigration policies
  • Disparities
  • Concentration
  • Comparative analysis
  • Consequences
  • Economic impact
  • Cultural integration
  • Social services
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