Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In the current area,
due to
the rise of globalization has made people buy the same
products
worldwidely
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worldwide
.
Furthermore
, there seems to be negative progress in current world
development
rather than positive progress.
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essay will elaborate more
why
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the same
product
can be impacted negatively to our world
development
. On the one hand, there were several negative impacts
to
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our world since the
products
that we used were the same. One negative is that the
countries
were
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not
belonging
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belong
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uniquely, they were no longer promoting their
uniqueness
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unique
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product
to others.
For instance
, in Indonesia, rather than buy their local
products
, several people try to import Korea’s
product
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products
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, because they want to have the same
product
as their idol.
As a result
, it
gives
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an economic impact
to
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the local players and we cannot explore our unique
products
.
On the other hand
, buying similar
products
has some positive
development
.
Firstly
, the
product
might become a universal
product
and it can be used by everyone.
This
is because the
product
tries to make a single
product
that all
countries
agree to use.
For example
, phones,
laptops
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and laptops
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, there are electronic
products
that give us the same treatment,
such
as the keyboard, system, utility, etc. In conclusion, despite some positive
development
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developments
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as a universal
product
and
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that
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can be used by everyone. The negative
development
of
countries
in becoming more similar outweighs the positive
development
. The negative impacts are the
countries
not belonging to a unique country, and there is an economic impact
to
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local players.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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