Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
A group of individuals present the view that all criminals should be treated with similar
punishment
, whereas
others believe there should be varied penalties due to
the offenders’ crimes. I strongly agree with the latter opinion.
On the one hand, some people justifiably argue that the judicial system should determine appropriate punishment
associated with the circumstances and motivation of the lawbreakers. In other words
, it is not fair to apply the same way to all types of crimes. For instance
, if a criminal murdered someone unintentionally, should not be punished as an offender who killed a victim deliberately. To clarify, not only considering a crime’s situation is essential but also
the criminal’s motivation plays a vital role in the judge’s decision. For example
, there is a world of differences between a murderer who has a criminal background and an individual who commits the same crime as a self-defence reaction.
On the other hand
, another group of people claim that the punishment
for each kind of lawbreaking should be fixed. They insist that it is the most time-saving and labour-saving way of justice. Therefore
, this
type of punishment
does not include complex bureaucracy and complex procedures as well as
a large number of human resources. As a result
, a great deal of money and time would be saved for the government to spend on other expenditures. However
, I do not find this
argument convincing as assigning a predetermined penalty to all kinds of offences seems unfair. Moreover
, it is an offender’s right to be investigated comprehensively in all aspects in order to a legitimate sentence. A case in point is that a burglar cannot be treated as equally as a smuggler, since it can lead to the objection of the criminals who did a crime with lower social significance.
To conclude
, in my view, criminal penalties should be determined relevant to the lawbreaker’s circumstances. Since the status and intention of each crime are various they should not be treated in the same way. Moreover
, invariant punishment
is likely to be unfair.Submitted by shabnam.sohanian on
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task achievement
Ensure you provide a clear introduction that presents the two opposite perspectives accurately, with a subsequent clear statement of your own position on the issue. It is important to maintain this position consistently throughout the essay for a higher score.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay should progress logically from one idea to the next, ensuring each paragraph has a clear central idea that is fully expanded upon. Transition words should be used effectively to guide the reader smoothly from one point to the next.
task achievement
Provide a balanced discussion of both views by dedicating similar lengths to each perspective. For a higher band score, you can develop more nuanced arguments with a wider range of vocabulary and complex sentence structures to enhance the preciseness and sophistication of your ideas.
task achievement
Your conclusion should summarize the key points discussed in the body paragraphs and restate your own position clearly. This reaffirms to the reader your understanding and stance on the topic discussed.
coherence and cohesion
Cohesion can be improved by paying attention to the overall 'flow' of the essay. This includes organizing ideas clearly, using a variety of linking words appropriately, and maintaining paragraph uniformity with clear topic sentences and conclusive statements.
coherence and cohesion
Develop and support main points with specific examples. Rather than simply stating a position, show how it applies in practical terms. This can include hypothetical scenarios or real-world evidence that convincingly backs up your arguments.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example