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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual 'income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual 'income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph
provide
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 information about how many
of
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households
 by their
income
 annually (between
lees
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less
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 than $25,000 - $100,000 or more) in the US in three different periods in 1007, 2011, and 2015.
Overall
, In 2007 and 2015, the number of people
had
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who had
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their
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an
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 annual
income
$
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of $
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100,000 or more was the
most
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highest
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,
while
 that $75,000 - $99,999 saw the reverse. To commence with, many
of
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US
households
 were having annual
income
$
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of $
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100,000 or more
was
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were
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 the majority and served nearly 30
millions
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million
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 people, by the year of 2011,
it
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apply
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then
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they
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 experienced a slight increase to around 27
millions
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million
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 before rising to 34
millions
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million
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 in 2015. Interestingly, a
simillar
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similar
 trend was placed in the number of people by $75,00-$99,999
income
annualy
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annually
, it stood at 14
millions
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million
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,
then
 fell slightly
to
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in 2011 before going up to exactly 15
millions
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million
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the
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at the
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 end of the period. It
was became
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became
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 the least among other categories. In terms of
three
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the three
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 remaining categories, both
of
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households
 with less than $25,000 and $25,000-$49,999 saw an increase after four years,
while
 the former stood at 25
millions
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million
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then
 increased to 28
millions
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million
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, the latter starting at 27
millions
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million
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 and went up to 30 million. These categories
then
 saw a small drop
by
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of
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 2
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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each.
However
, only the number of
households
 with $50,000 - $74,999
income
 annually remained the same.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, income, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual income
  • households
  • income distribution
  • peak
  • rise
  • fall
  • stable
  • significant
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
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