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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The bar chart demonstrates how many
hours
 each day were spent doing relaxation activities on a holiday in
Greece
 in August 2019 by Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian travellers.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen from the given graph that Chinese tourists preferred to read books on a vacation in
Greece
,
while
 visitors from Brazil spent most
time
 at the beach. With regards to travellers from China and Brazilia had significantly different preferences in how they used their
time
 on a celebration in 2019. Sightseers from both countries spent their
time
 visiting places for an hour and two
hours
 a day respectively throughout the period in
Greece
. 8
hours
 were spent reading books by Chinese visitors,
while
 it took only half by Brazilian tourists.
However
, travellers from Brazil chose to be at the beach for a quarter
time
 of the day, at the same
time
, visitors from China were only 3
hours
. Turning to American and Turkish tourists, the
time
 spent on a sightseeing trip in
Greece
 was identical to 3
hours
a
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twenty-four-hour period.
However
,
whereas
 the former suggested being at the beach for 4
hours
 and 5
hours
 reading a book, the latter chose to spend their
time
 opposite of it.
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