The chart below gives information on the average cost. of a monthly plan from four defferent mabile phone providers in a European Country. between January and September 2012, measured in erous.

The chart below gives information on the average cost. of a monthly plan from four defferent mabile phone providers in a European Country. between January and September 2012, measured in erous.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information on the average cost. of a monthly plan from four defferent mabile phone providers in a European Country. between January and September 2012, measured in erous.
The graph
down
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below
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demonstrates facts on the range price
pf
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of
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monthly
programme
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programmes
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from 4 different smartphone suppliers in a European country. snice January until september2012, measured in
euros
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.
Overall
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, The range price of Alpha supplier increased significantly.
Also
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, there was a normal increase in
costs
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the costs
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of Demo and Lex.
While
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the fourth one the Sim Tx gives a decline statue. Alpha giver started the period with only 5
euros
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and continued with the price until
the
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apply
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June with only a slight
rising
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rise
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between them, and
begin
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began
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increase gradually in the next month and kept like
this
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to be
finally
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in the end of
period
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the period
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with
average
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an average
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25
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of 25
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euros
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.Unlike that, Sim Tx began
period
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the period
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with almost 9 and continued in a steady way to
reached
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reach
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nearly 15
euros
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in the median , following
that
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apply
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a
dramatically
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dramatic
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reduction to finish with a median down
the
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apply
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10
euros
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.
Moreover
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, the rest two where steady and similar results with
a
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apply
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slights
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slight
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differences , Lex
appear
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appeared
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with almost 12
euros
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and Kept on
it
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apply
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with steady
move
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moves
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and small up-down changes until finished with over 16
euros
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in the median ,
while
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Demo showed up at 15 and
get
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got
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increased in dramatically way to reach 20 in May and kept like
this
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up to 2 months and increased again to be 25 in July but
this
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changed immediatly to get dropped in slight amount .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words euros with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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