Doctors in many countries are saying that people are not getting enough physical exercises. What do you think about the cause of this problem? How can you address this?
In some countries, health professionals have studied that physical
exercises
are not being taken enough by individuals. This
essay will explain further
details about the addressed problem by providing the root causes and the solutions for it.
Looking from an overall
perspective, we know that the growth, which is widely happening right now, of every aspects
of our life through globalization has changed the way people live from its origin. Change to a singular noun
aspect
For instance
, technology
has taken over the traditional way of communication and socialization from mankind to make them more busy and not reachable. As a result
, they cannot get away from their gadget and stay in the same position from time to time with barely time to do leisure activities such
as physical exercises
. With regards to the initial of this
endpoint was
a gadget, governments could give a regulation or a program on addressing Wrong verb form
being
this
to create a healthier community. This
can be done by providing more free sports areas and reducing the working hours at the workplace.
Another reason to be discussed is how parents nowadays give their offspring to be interfered
with Change to the active voice
interfere
have interfered
technology
too soon. Consequently
, they would be far away from sports activities, outdoor games, socialization with their environment, and so on. The implementation of physical exercises
should be taught as soon as possible as children are still in the learning process. We surely have thought that they would be the next generation as they will then
need to keep themselves healthy. Therefore
, we need to address this
habit to be built and used by many parents in every country.
In conclusion, physical exercises
are one of the top notes for countries to be implemented
as thought by Wrong verb form
implement
the
doctors. The root causes are defined mostly by using Correct article usage
apply
technology
either by the adult or their offspring. This
problem could be solved if we can ask governments to provide supporting devices to do the exercises
and parents should teach their children that from the beginning whereas
giving technology
too soon.Submitted by studymeterr on
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coherence cohesion
The essay addresses the topic, and there is a logical structure present. However, you should ensure that your essay's paragraphs are clearly divided, each with a single, well-developed idea. Sometimes the point of a paragraph is not clear. Use a range of cohesive devices, but make sure they are used accurately and help the reader follow your argument.
task achievement
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