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Band 6.5

Write a letter to a friend who invited you to meet up but you missed the appointment. Apologise for not messaging Explain why you could not go Suggest another date

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Dear Purvi, I hope
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 letter finds you well. First and foremost, I owe you a sincere apology for not attending your birthday party on Monday evening and, even more so, for not letting you know that I wouldn't be able to make it. I had every intention of joining you to celebrate, but unfortunately, I had a small accident on my way over. I suffered a minor head injury when I got into a scuffle with a homeless man during my bus ride.
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, I had to call the police, and amidst all the chaos, I completely forgot to send you a message about the situation. With the injury, I’ve been unable to travel much, as it’s still causing me some discomfort. But once I recover, I would love to come over and hang out with you. I’m thinking of visiting you on the 15th of April, as it's a Sunday, and I should have a few days off by
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. Once again, I am so sorry for missing your special day and not informing you sooner. I truly hope you understand, and I can’t wait to make it up to you. Take care
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 and best wishes, Hetvi

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coherence and cohesion
The structure of the letter is generally clear, but ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single idea can improve readability.
task achievement
In your explanation, consider using a more concise phrase for the accident to enhance clarity, such as 'I had an unfortunate incident during my commute.'
suitable writing tone
The tone is conversational and warm, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
complete response
You expressed genuine feelings of regret and desire to reconnect, which strengthens the message.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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