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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

#aim #science #people #lives
The most essential thing about
science
 is it should be a way to improve everyone's lives. I firmly agree with
this
 opinion because first of all,
science
 is the fundamental thinking for the
researchers
 to investigate
of
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any subject and
then
 it can be as
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references
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 for upcoming untold stories that
happens
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 in the world.
Science
 has a wide of
meaning
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meanings
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 and perspectives.
Science
 as
the
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fundamental thinking is important for
researchers
 in order to investigate
of
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the problem or issues, including how to
doing
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research
 step by step from
identify
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 an issue,
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an
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 hypothesis,
choose
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 a suitable methodology and
finally
 producing the result and the conclusion of the
research
. Every subject needs to apply
this
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 following steps, not just in subjects related
with
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science
, but all
of
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kind
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 of subjects.
For example
, even if the
researchers
 of sociology want to address an issue
that is
 not related to
science
, they have to use
this
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 following steps so that it can
be approve
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scientificaly
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scientifically
. Another reason is
science
 gives
explanation
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 about everything that happens in
this
 world.
Moreover
, it can be
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references
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 for people to investigate and give
explanation
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explanations
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 about something
that is
 still unknown.
For example
, the invention of gravity by Newton led other
researchers
 to provide other theories
such
 as fluid, speed, and acceleration. In conclusion,
science
 is designed to improve people's lives because it has been
as
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a fundamental thinking of
research
 and it gives references and
idea
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ideas
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 for the next
research
that is
 still unknown.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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