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Students today can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer neccessary. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #access #information #libraries #neccessary
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We live in a world
that is
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 majorly
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 of technological advancements that help us through our daily
life
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. One
such
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 accessibility that it offers is the efficiency of information gathering. Because of how interconnected we are in today's world, news and
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informations
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 from one side of the globe could be heard from the other side. Technology
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also
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push
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 a hole through time and is apparent by the ability for us to easily discover articles
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 so far back in
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history.
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, despite the many advantages that our gadgets have provided us, I still
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 upon the importance of books and libraries and believe that they are not irrelevant to
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 it is true that online articles provide
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 more easily, that does not incentivize the redundancy of libraries.
Although
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 the
accesibility
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accessibility
 of
library
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 information is worse than it is on the digital side,
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library
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 offers more than plain
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informations
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. When you look up an atlas,
for example
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, you will encounter how rich and informative it is compared to just blindly searching through an online search engine. There is a certain art and feel when you go to a
library
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 and search for
an information
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 that cannot simply
get
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 replicated with online searching.
Moreover
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, books are a better source for gathering learning materials than phones.
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 is
due to
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 the nature of making an
education
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 book. The process of writing the book itself is
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 and complex, as you would need to write a
near perfect
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 book to prevent any misinformation. After the writing, you would need to pass a verification in order to make sure that you don't write anything
that is
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the
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online forums anywhere on the internet. In conclusion, the art and
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 when you step inside a
library
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 is a sensation that cannot be represented in any search engine.
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, the accuracy of
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 from books
are
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 almost always near perfection as it would need to pass walls of verification.
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