The maps show the park which was built in 1920 and current construction of the park.
The picture above depicts the sketch of Grange
Park
. Two
illustrations were provided: one is the current positioning and the other was an ancient map of the same place back in 1920. As we can see, there are some distinct features between these two
pictures. Generally, we can see tremendous development of the arena.
Some amusement was added, such
as a Children's play area and a Cafe. Some were upgraded i.e. from the fountain to the water feature, and the musician's stage became an amphitheatre for concerts. On the contrary
, two
entertainment were removed, which are the greenhouse and the pond. Other visible changes are the additions and centralization of the seats, gathered around the central, rounding the rose garden.
Back in 1920, there were only two
entrances from Eldon Street and Arnold Avenue. However
, another entry was built recently that connects directly to the underground car park
. This
renewal made the park
more accessible and may easily visited by the car users.
The main sight of this
park
was also
swapped. The fountain was the star of the place due to
its placement at the centre in the old times. Meanwhile, today, it had
been replaced by the united Wrong verb form
has
two
rose gardens which were originally placed on the upper and lower corner
of Fix the agreement mistake
corners
this
ground. As mentioned before, the overall
neighborhood
has developed both structurally and functionally.Change the spelling
neighbourhood
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