the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now

the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now
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The diagram given illustrates the layout of the central library 20 years ago compared to how it is today. It is already apparent that several alterations were made as there are wider kinds of services available in the present version of the library.
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the rooms have been reorganized, the entrance is in the same place as it was. The tables and chairs that were located in the middle of the library had been removed, left with the empty hallway. The CDs, videos, and computer game
room
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on the upper left side was renovated as the
room
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is visibly bigger and was
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reorganized for storytelling occasions and the children’s
books
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section, complete with 2 sofas as an extra facility. Across that, the reading
room
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has changed to be the computer
room
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and the old adult fiction
books
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hallway in between has shifted into all reference
books
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. In the upper right corner, the children's
books
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room
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has been modified into a lecture
room
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. In front of that
room
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, what used to be an adult non-fiction section has now been upgraded to be a multi-use space, which includes an adult fiction
books
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area, an information desk, and several vending machines for visitors to enjoy.
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, There was an enquiry desk right below the hallway before it was altered to be a cafe
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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