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The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bars
presents
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present
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that
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apply
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the struggles
community
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the community
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face
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faces
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 when they choose to live abroad
started
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starting
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in
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at
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 18 years old.
Overall
, the oldest groups have the most difficulty
to learn
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learning
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 the local language,
while
 the youngest groups are making friends. For the
age
 between 18-34, learning the local language only has
smallest
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the smallest
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 portion about 29% compared to the
age
 between 35-54 about 35% and over 55 about 54%.
However
, making friends
are
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is
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 the most difficult thing for the
age
 between 18-34 and
have
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has
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 the highest portion about 46% compared to the others which the
age
 between 35-54 about 36% and over 55 about 23%. 
Further
, finding somewhere to live has
medium
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a medium
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 challenge about 40%
for
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of
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 the
age
between
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of
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 18-34.
Although
this
 struggle still has the highest percentage compared to the
age
 over 55 about 22%.
This
 challenge is the
most hard
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hardest
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 thing for
the
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those
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age
between
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apply
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35-54
in
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apply
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which has the highest percentage about 39% compared to
another struggles
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another struggle
other struggles
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 9 times.
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