The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

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The diagram provides information about what are the stages of producing

sugar

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from

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cane.

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, the processes of it consist of 7 different stages varying from seedling to cooling. The stages begin with the growing

sugar

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cane for a timeline of 12-18 months. Afterwards, the canes are harvested by hand or by technological vehicles. Whenever these 2 parts of the canes are finished, picked-up ones are sent to manufacturers for crushing into small pieces. The producer put them into slides for making juice.

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liquid goes through limestone filters to purify it.

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, the purified juice is poured into a big evaporator

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and becomes a kind of syrup. For the sixth stage, the syrup is sent to centrifuge, the goal of

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process is

separate

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to separate

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the

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crystals and the syrup. In the

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part before launching the manufacture, separated

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is left for drying and cooling into big slenders.

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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

In many countries, the number of people suffering from stress in the workplace is increasing. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to tackle it?

Some people think that government should give high salary to the celebrities but others think that it should be provided to doctors and teachers discuss both views and give ur views

Computer and A.I technology are increasingly being used for online education. Can artificial intelligence enhance the learning experience? Is this a positive or negative development?