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The line graph shows the number of books borrowed from four libraries in the mouths of June, July, August and September of

The line graph shows the number of books borrowed from four libraries in the mouths of June, July, August and September of
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The line graph illustrates the
amount
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 of
books
 lent from four different libraries
such
 as
West
Eaton
,
Ryeslip
,
Sutton
Wood
, and Church Mount during the period of June
upto
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up to
 September 2023.  In general,
West
Eaton
 and Church Mount have a stable increase in the period of June
upto
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up to
 September 2023.
On the other hand
,
Ryeslip
's library has an opposite trend compared to
West
Eaton
 and Church Mount.
However
, there was a fluctuation line
displays
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 in the graph for
Sutton
Wood
. As seen in the data provided, a
rose
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of
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in
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 the amount of
books
 lent from
West
Eaton
 (50),
Ryeslip
 (50), and
Sutton
Wood
 (25)
in
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from
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 the month of June until July 2023. The number of
books
 lent from
Sutton
Wood
 dropped dramatically
in
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from
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 July to August 2023 approximately from 275 to 100
books
.
Nevertheless
, a significant amount (200) of
books
 jumped in the period of August to September 2023
which
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borrowed
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was borrowed
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 from
Sutton
Wood
.
Further
, the number of
books
 borrowed went up considerably in
Ryeslip
's library from 300 to 160 during four periods.
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