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The line graph shows the number of books borrowed from four libraries in the mouths of June, July, August and September of

The line graph shows the number of books borrowed from four libraries in the mouths of June, July, August and September of
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The line graph illustrates the
amount
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 of
books
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 lent from four different libraries
such
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 as
West
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Eaton
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,
Ryeslip
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,
Sutton
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Wood
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, and Church Mount during the period of June
upto
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up to
 September 2023.  In general,
West
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Eaton
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 and Church Mount have a stable increase in the period of June
upto
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up to
 September 2023.
On the other hand
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,
Ryeslip
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's library has an opposite trend compared to
West
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Eaton
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 and Church Mount.
However
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, there was a fluctuation line
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 in the graph for
Sutton
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Wood
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. As seen in the data provided, a
rose
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of
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 the amount of
books
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 lent from
West
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Eaton
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 (50),
Ryeslip
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 (50), and
Sutton
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Wood
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 (25)
in
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 the month of June until July 2023. The number of
books
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 lent from
Sutton
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Wood
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 dropped dramatically
in
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 July to August 2023 approximately from 275 to 100
books
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.
Nevertheless
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, a significant amount (200) of
books
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 jumped in the period of August to September 2023
which
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borrowed
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was borrowed
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 from
Sutton
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Wood
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.
Further
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, the number of
books
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 borrowed went up considerably in
Ryeslip
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's library from 300 to 160 during four periods.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, west, eaton, ryeslip, sutton, wood with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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