The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries

▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentages of struggles people often face when living in another country based on three different
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groups.
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, the challenges include making
friends
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, finding somewhere to live, and learning the local
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. Looking at the data from the
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group of 18 until 34, most of them
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having to make
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with a proportion up to 46%. It is
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followed by finding somewhere to live closely behind with 40% and learning the local
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at 29%.
On the other hand
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, the people in the
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group 35-54 struggle the most with finding somewhere to live evidenced by 39%. Regardless, the proportion of learning the local
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and making
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does not differ much. It is closely similar with just a 1 percent difference at 36% and 35%. Moving towards the
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group of over 55, the highest percentage goes to learning the local
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with up to 54%. The percentage is quietly followed by making
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and finding somewhere to live at 23% and 22%.
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, each
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groups have different preferences of struggles with no similarity.
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