The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The given line graph compares the
number
of visits to two
music
websites that were
Music
Choice
and
Pop
Parade between
Day
1 and 15.
Overall
,
Music
Choice
was the predominant website during the surveyed period, except for
Day
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12 and 13. If we examine the graph deeply,
although
the
number
of
Pop
Parade viewers dropped dramatically from approximately 120,000 on
Day
3 to shy of 40,000 on
Day
9, it
finally
recovered in the next 2 days and reached its second highest of 150,000 people on
Day
11.
On the other hand
, the
number
of
Music
Choice
visitors remained below 40,000 between
Day
4 and 11. After that, it witnessed a surge to nearly 120,000 individuals on
Day
12. From
Day
1 to 11, even though the
number
of
Music
Choice
viewers was fewer than
Pop
Decade, the latter overtook the former to become the more popular one.
Lastly
, on
day
15,
Pop
Decade visitors reached a peak of 170,000,
whereas
there was a significant fall in the
number
of
Music
Choice
viewers, accounting for roughly half of the
Pop
Decade.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, music, choice, pop, day with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Music sites
  • Web traffic
  • Number of visits
  • Trend analysis
  • Initial phase
  • Steady increase
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant change
  • Peaks
  • Turning point
  • Growth rate
  • Seasonal variation
  • Comparative analysis
  • Long-term trend
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