Some people say that social media is a digital drug that has left many people addicted enhanced their lots of valuable time while others say social media has Enable Connectivity with the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion on the topic.
Social
media
has been bringing numerous benefits to individual's
life in recent years. Correct article usage
an individual's
While
some people
believe that this
novelty leads to waste
of Correct article usage
a waste
time
for individuals, others advocate people
may connect easily via social media
. This
essay will explain the
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,
and support Remove the comma
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idea
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the idea
of
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that
people
may support
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media
.
Use
of Correct article usage
The use
Instagram
or Twitter has been seen as a wasting
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waste of
time
by some people
. They believe that men and women are likely to kill their time
by posting on Instagram
or liking other one's photographs, instead
of working or engaging in creative activities like reading, or painting. In their point of view, spending time
online pages for sliding timeline
should be accepted as a harmful habit, which disturbs Fix the agreement mistake
timelines
poeple's
creativity in their business and personal life. Correct your spelling
people's
For instance
, many surveys, which have been carriying
in Turkey, have been indicating that the more Verb problem
carried out
people
spend time
on their Instagram
, page, the more they become disturbed and unfocused.
On the other hand
, proponents of the use of social media
believe that people
may connect more effortlessly and more effectively by utilizing applications including Instagram
, or Linkedin. To clarify, it is undeniable that time
is accepted as the most valuable currency across the world. Therefore
, employers are likely to spend less time
by
meeting employees, so they prefer to check candidates' accounts by means of Linkedin, just in case they find their accounts appropriate for the company, they arrange a Change preposition
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face to face
meeting. Add a hyphen
face-to-face
Furthermore
, employees may apply
various positions even in different countries via their LinkedIn accounts. In comparison with Add the preposition
apply for
applying
a job online, traditional meetings may result in unexpected costs for applicants, including fare, and accommodation.
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applying for
Finally
, I believe in
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that
people
may contact each other via Instagram
or other social media
applications better, compared to call
someone. Wrong verb form
calling
For instance
, Skype users are able to see their friends or relatives who live abroad, which is impossible with traditional phone calls, in this
way their sense of missing may alleviate
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be alleviated
Moreover
, a good-designed Linkedln
account may put the applicant one step ahead of others.
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LinkedIn
To conclude
, while
some people
tend to demonize social media
, I, personally support the
others, since social Correct article usage
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provide numerous benefits, including connecting each
other effortlessly, and saving Change preposition
with each
time
and also
money, while
applying
a job.Add the preposition
applying for
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