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Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in their adopted countries, immigrants should abandon their old ways and adapt to local customs and codes of behavior. Do you agree or disagree?

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People
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 are mostly inclined to migrate to other countries at present than in the past. It is to say that, for their adaptation to the new place, migrants should leave their own previous lifestyles and ought to follow the local customs and
norms
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. I personally disagree with
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 viewpoint because cultural
behaviour
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 and
norms
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 are the identity of
one
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 nation and migration should not refrain them from practising it. On the
one
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 hand, every
country
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 has their own culture and there is no doubt. Those who are in search of better opportunities and secure living, migrate to a foreign
country
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 and encounter a new environment,
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, and culture.
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, it does not mean that they are bound to follow the
norms
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 of that foreign
country
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 leaving their own ways of
behaviour
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 behind. Rather practicing their own
behaviour
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 and customs could provide that
country
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 a cultural diversity which might be a good example in the world. Take
for example
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 Australia. It is popularly known as a culturally diverse
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 in which 80% of inhabitants are migrants and they are free to follow their own
norms
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 and behaviours and nothing is creating any problem about that.
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, someone's own lifestyle and
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 is associated with his or her existence and identity.
People
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 mostly migrate for development but if they are compelled to change their past
norms
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 the result of migration would be negative. If
people
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 change it and adopt a new
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, that would not be good for their development.
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, they will forget their roots and will suffer from identity crises.
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, in
one
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 state of England, migrated
people
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 are bound to follow the present cultural
behaviour
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 leaving behind their past ones. Eventually, that results in a fall in migration in that province because
people
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 do not like it .
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. the result of forgetting
one
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's own ways of life is not always beneficial.
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, migrants should be given the opportunity
of practising
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 their own lifestyle,
norms
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, and
behaviour
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. It would not be beneficial to leave someone's
behaviour
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 and lifestyle because without it a particular nation cannot thrive.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • integration
  • social cohesion
  • cultural clashes
  • original culture
  • diversity
  • identity loss
  • psychological distress
  • balanced approach
  • local customs
  • cultural identities
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