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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides data on how many tourists visiting a certain
Carribean
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Caribbean
island
 in the 7-year period (2010-2017)
Overall
, the
number
 of people visiting
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the Carribean
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Carribean
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Caribbean
island
 increased over the
years
. There was
also
 a shift of popularity in the way people
staying
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stayed
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 on holiday in both 2016 and 2017. The
number
 of visits rose significantly
most
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in most
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 of the
years
, starting from just a
million
 in 2010 to 3.5
million
 in the final year. In 2010, roughly 0.7
million
 people spent their holiday on the
island
, and the
number
 experienced a slight growth
until
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to
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 just 1.5
million
from
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in
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 2013 and remained steady until 2017, except for a minor drop to about 1.2
million
 in 2016.
However
, despite fewer visitors who
like
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liked
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 to stay
in
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on
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 the cruise in 2010 (0.3
million
), after a slight decrease in 2012, the figure grew significantly in the following
years
, growing
1.7
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to 1.7
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million
 visitors and overtaking the
number
 of those who
sleep
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slept
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 on
island
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an island
the island
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 in the
last
 two
years
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, number, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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