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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides data on how many tourists visiting a certain
Carribean
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Caribbean
island
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 in the 7-year period (2010-2017)
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, the
number
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 of people visiting
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the Carribean
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Carribean
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Caribbean
island
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 increased over the
years
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. There was
also
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 a shift of popularity in the way people
staying
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stayed
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 on holiday in both 2016 and 2017. The
number
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 of visits rose significantly
most
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in most
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 of the
years
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, starting from just a
million
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 in 2010 to 3.5
million
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 in the final year. In 2010, roughly 0.7
million
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 people spent their holiday on the
island
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, and the
number
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 experienced a slight growth
until
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to
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 just 1.5
million
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from
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in
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 2013 and remained steady until 2017, except for a minor drop to about 1.2
million
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 in 2016.
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, despite fewer visitors who
like
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liked
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 to stay
in
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on
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 the cruise in 2010 (0.3
million
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), after a slight decrease in 2012, the figure grew significantly in the following
years
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, growing
1.7
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to 1.7
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million
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 visitors and overtaking the
number
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 of those who
sleep
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slept
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 on
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island
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an island
the island
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 in the
last
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 two
years
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, number, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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