It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheaper clothes. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, people have a
lot
of choices about clothes
, some of them buy lots of cheap clothes
, but some of them rather a few expensive clothes
. From my point of view
I would rather Add a comma
view,
lots
of Add a missing verb
have lots
clothes
with
Change preposition
at
minimum
price. Because I will get more assortment and I can save money. Because it is not brand.
As it is obvious, now in Correct article usage
a minimum
modern
world. You can find a Add an article
the modern
lot
of types of things in
Change preposition
at
cheap
Correct article usage
a cheap
cost
or in priceless
version. So if choose brands, you can get Correct article usage
a priceless
few
Correct article usage
a few
of
Change preposition
apply
clothes
without many assortments. And if you got minimum clothes
you would not get clothes
for parties or for home. In
addition
if you choose a Add a comma
addition,
lot
of stuff of
Change preposition
apply
clothes
. You can go whatever
you want. Correct your spelling
wherever
For example
, someone will invite you to Correct article usage
a meeting
meeting
and you need Change the verb form
meet
suit
. No problem and you wear it. And people could not notice that it is low Add an article
a suit
the suit
cost
.
The second option that you get from buying low
expensive garments. That you can save money from it. Because your 5 Correct word choice
apply
clothes
can cost
overall
just 50$ but the brand will cost
150$ and in this
case
you can save 100$ and get more Add a comma
case,
clothes
. For example
, Gucci clothes
cost
more than 500$ but will be equal in quality with
raiment which Change preposition
to
cost
just 30$. So Correct your spelling
that's
thats
why I rather buy a Correct your spelling
that
lot
of low
Add a hyphen
low-cost
cost
outfit
In conclusion, buying many Fix the agreement mistake
outfits
of
attire Change preposition
apply
with
cheap price Change preposition
at
give
you more impact than buying brands. As all Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
outfit
and economising your cash.Fix the agreement mistake
outfits
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- moreover
- also
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- although
- even though
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