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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line chart depicts
wheat
export
 (in
millions
 of
tonnes
) to three different areas from 1985 to 1990.
Overall
, only the European Community experienced positive growth,
while
 Canada and Australia saw a stagnancy and a negative trend, respectively.
To begin
 with,
two
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 largest
wheat
 importers in 1985, Canada (about 20
millions
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of
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tonnes
), and
European
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the European
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 Community (around 17
millions
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tonnes
)
,
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experienced a downward trend, whilst Australia did the reserve in 1986. Meanwhile, in the following year, the former witnessed an upward trend, contrary to the latter. From 1986 to 1988, the
amount
 of
wheat
export
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 to Canada
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increased and reached its peak in 1988 at 25
millions
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tonnes
. Yet, in the period
of
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 1985 and 1989,
the
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export
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decreased to
its
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their
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 lowest point at approximately 15
millions
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tonnes
.
Furthermore
, it recovered to the initial
amount
 of
export
 in 1990.
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 1987 to 1988,
European
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the European
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 Community’s
wheat
 import had no changes in
amount
, but in the three following years, it gradually
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sprang
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 to its pinnacle in the
last
 period with more than 20
millions
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tonnes
. After 1987,
the
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wheat
export
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 to Australia dropped slowly until reaching
its
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their
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 smallest
amount
 at about 10
millions
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tonnes
 in
the
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1990.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, export, millions, tonnes, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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