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the graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas/

the graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas/
#differences #wheat #exports #three #areas
The line chart illustrates the
number
 of
wheats
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wheat
kinds of wheat
ears of wheat
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 which
exported
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were exported
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 in three areas
with
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apply
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for 5 years from 1985 to 1990.
Overall
, Canada
was
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had
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 the highest
number
 at the beginning, but
European
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the European
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 Community did the
last
 period.
Initially
, the highest
number
 of wheat exports were taken by Canada at almost 20
million
, followed by
European
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the European
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 Community and Australia at 17.5 and 15
million
, in a row. In the following
year
, only
Australian
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Australians
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whose
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who
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 consumed wheat increased
at
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to
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 16
million
.
However
, after that, Australia had a downtrend experience in which
the
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apply
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last
year
 it occupied the
last
 stage at slightly over 10
million
. Eventually, in 1986,
European
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the European
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 country
was
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had
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 the
last
number
 of wheat
export
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exports
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 at almost 18
million
, but the
last
 period
it
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apply
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showed a reverse accounting for over 20
million
. Interestingly, in 1988 Canada
the
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had the
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 command
number
 of exports all over the
year
 at 25
million
, but the next
year
 it dramatically dropped
at
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to
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 under 15
million
,
while
 the following
year
 it climbed
at
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to
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 almost 20
millio
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million
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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