The table give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in london and sydney during the same weekend in december 2018.

The table give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in london and sydney during the same weekend in december 2018.
The table chart illustrates
that
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the information
of
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temperature
and time of daytime in London and Sydney
the
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same weekend in December 2018.
Overall
,
from
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the table
show
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that London has
flucuated
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fluctuated
maximum
temperature
.Including minimum
temperature
.
In contrast
, Sydney has
uptrend
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both of maximum and minimum. From London depict that information started from
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Friday
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friday
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28th sunrise at 08:05 and sunset
15
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at 15
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:57 The maximum
temperature
was 9
celcius
and minimum
temperature
was 4
celcius
in the next following day the maximum
temperature
significantly incresed to 13
celcius
.
While
minimum
temperature
reduced to 3
celcius
However
, in sunday 30th the maximum
temperature
fell down to 10
celcius
but incontrast the minimum
temperature
moderately rise to 5
celcius
On the other hand
,maximum
temperature
from Sydney started from 26
celcius
at sunrise time 05:45 and sunset time 20:06 the maximum
temperature
has slightly up to 28
celcius
in Saturday 29th. After that in sunday 30th maximum
temperature
rise to 31
celcius
.
In addition
minimum
temperature
started from 17
celcius
and moderately rise to 18
celcius
in 29th in the next following day up to 19
celcius
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