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Topic: Spoken communication is always more powerful than written communication. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#topic #communication
Communication
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speak
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 directly whether
encounter
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encountered
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 face-to-face or by phone, is better than
written
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. Having taken other solutions into consideration, I agree that spoken
communication
 is more powerful than written
communication
.
Firstly
, there are many ways of
communications
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 currently. One of the most
common
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 used is by speaking directly and have several advantages compared with
written
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. Spoken
communication
, could eliminate bias and misunderstanding
,
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 because the tone of voice is essential in delivering information.
Therefore
,
instead
 of
written
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,
talk
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 with people could increase the clarity
in
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 facts. To illustrate, sales worker
are
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prefer to meet directly with their potential clients rather than chat or email them, because they show their confidence and convince them.
Secondly
, communicating
with
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 speaking is
consider
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as
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 more polite way
for
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 giving information. When speaking, people are not only talking with their interlocutors but
also
 it has an eye-contact and body language
while
deliver
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 it. With
this
 approach, they can deliver details and explanations more interesting.
As a result
, could increase
an
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interactions and gain bonding
each
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 other.
For example
, in
workfield
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work field
 it is common for
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employees
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employee
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employees
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 to give a presentation to
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the management
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management
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 level,
by deliver
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Delivering
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 it by speaking
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it
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will
consider
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as
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a polite action and
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building
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 trust. In conclusion, speaking is more
influental
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influential
 than
written
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writing
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 because it could decrease bias and
more
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well behaved
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. I,
therefore
, remain firmly convinced that spoken is more dominant than written, in terms of
communication
method
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.
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introduction conclusion present
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relevant specific examples
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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