Some say that sprots play an important role in society. Others, however, think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both view, and give your opinion.

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, others thinking that it is the best activity to get relaxing.
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am going to discuss these two views and elaborate on my own
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coherence cohesion
Ensure there is a clear structure to your essay, comprising an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each section should serve a distinct purpose with the introduction setting the scene, the body elaborating the points, and the conclusion summarizing and stating your opinion clearly.
coherence cohesion
Within paragraphs, make sure to use cohesive devices, such as linking words and phrases, to create a smooth flow of ideas. Each paragraph should contain one main idea, followed by supporting sentences that develop this idea further.
task achievement
For a complete response, it is crucial to discuss both viewpoints mentioned in the prompt as well as provide your own opinion. Your essay should also offer a clear, logical progression of ideas.
task achievement
Aim to communicate your ideas clearly and comprehensively. This involves organizing points logically and explaining them fully. Be as specific as possible by providing relevant examples or reasons to support your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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