In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?
While
currently in some parts of the world, there are more senior Linking Words
people
than ever, some Use synonyms
people
think that it brings several Use synonyms
drawbacks
to the Use synonyms
government
. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, some Linking Words
also
believe that it will bring more positive impacts to the public. Linking Words
This
essay will discuss the impacts of having a larger number of elderly Linking Words
people
, in which the Use synonyms
drawbacks
will take precedence over the benefits as Use synonyms
firstly
, it will increase the fund allocation of the country to social services, but still, it will Linking Words
also
contribute to giving wisdom to the society.
The Linking Words
government
is required to channel its investment to seniors, Use synonyms
such
as by providing nursing homes. When there is a higher number of seniors, it means the Linking Words
government
needs more money to spend Use synonyms
on
because they will need to hire professionals to take care of the elderly which Change preposition
apply
are
more likely to be expensive. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
For example
, in Indonesia, the salary for caregivers in nursing homes is high Linking Words
due to
its availability.
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However
, the elderly Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
also
bring advantages to their small circle, one of them is by bringing wisdom to their grandchildren. A grandson could have a better point of view and Linking Words
an advice
from his grandparents because the grandparents have lived longer compared to the grandson’s parents. Remove the article
advice
a piece of advice
a bit of advice
For instance
, grandparents will tell their grandson that manners are important, especially when talking to someone older.
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To conclude
, a huge number of seniors in a country can bring both benefits and Linking Words
drawbacks
, Use synonyms
although
the Linking Words
drawbacks
may outweigh the benefits because the Use synonyms
government
needs to allocate more money to build nursing homes rather than the positive impacts by giving Use synonyms
the
young Correct article usage
apply
people
wisdom.Use synonyms
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