Some people believe that governments should not support the arts (painting, music, sculpture) and instead support other areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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instead
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budget
on Use synonyms
arts
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instace
painting, music, sculpture, and many more. Correct your spelling
instance
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view,
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agree that investment in public services Change the capitalization
I
play
a very important role, Change the verb form
plays
i
think that spending Change the capitalization
I
budget
on Use synonyms
art
sector is Correct article usage
the art
also
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a
crucial for Change the article
apply
the
society.
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apply
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with, Linking Words
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dissagree
with the statement because Correct your spelling
disagree
arts
could develop our economic sector. Use synonyms
Furthermore
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so many people have Add a comma
country,
sense
of Add an article
a sense
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arts
but with the limitation of Fix the agreement mistake
art
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budget
they can't expand their creativity. Add a comma
budget,
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, an artist Linking Words
could't
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couldn't
could
sell
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sells
theit
product through social media Correct your spelling
their
because
the lack of technology and Add the preposition
because of
budget
. Use synonyms
Hence
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its
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it's
it is
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the governments
governments
role to allocate its money Change to a genitive case
government's
governments'
for
the artist.
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to
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, many Linking Words
publlic
facilities Correct your spelling
public
that
need to Correct pronoun usage
apply
build
or Wrong verb form
be built
renovation
. So, spending Replace the word
renovated
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budget
on Correct article usage
a budget
that is
crucial. Linking Words
Moreover
, the Linking Words
convinience
of society in using public facilities Correct your spelling
convenience
are
important. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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, Linking Words
government
should provide nice Add an article
the government
sidewalk
for Fix the agreement mistake
sidewalks
the
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apply
pedestrian
. Maybe Fix the agreement mistake
pedestrians
thats
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that's
that
make
people more agree on that.
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makes
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agree that the government should allocate a large part of its Change the capitalization
I
budget
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on
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to
such
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the
society like public services, Correct article usage
apply
i
think that Change the capitalization
I
arts
, music, and theatre should Use synonyms
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also
alse
be financed since they play an important role in Correct your spelling
also
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people's
peoples's
development and Correct your spelling
people's
entertaiment
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entertainment
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