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The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates how much air
pollution
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 was generated by three pollutant sources (Electricity generation, Transport and Industry) in four
countries
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 including
China
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, America, Japan and Australia
according to
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 a report which went back to 2012. Looking at the
overall
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 perspective, it is apparent that
China
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 accounted for the highest
level
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 of produced air
pollution
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 by far compared to other
countries
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.
Moreover
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, both America and
China
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 comprised a significant
level
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 of
pollution
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 of the total reported
level
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. With regard to Electricity generation,
this
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 source generated just below 60
PPM
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 of
pollution
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 in
China
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,
whereas
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this
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 amount was between 15
PPM
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 and 30
PPM
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 in other
countries
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.
Moreover
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, Transport accounted for a considerable amount of 70
PPM
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 and nearly 60
PPM
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 in
China
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 and America, respectively, as opposed to Japan and Australia at 30
PPM
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 and 20
PPM
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.
Although
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China
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 generated the highest
level
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 of
pollution
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 (80
PPM
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) through the industry segment among other
countries
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, neither of the other
countries
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 released more than 45
PPM
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 which belongs to Japan.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pollution, countries, china, level, ppm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollution levels
  • sources of pollution
  • industrial pollution
  • transportation-related pollution
  • household pollution
  • highest levels
  • lowest levels
  • notable changes
  • anomalies
  • comparisons
  • summarise
  • highlight
  • analyze
  • chart
  • data
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