The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates how much air
pollution
was generated by three pollutant sources (Electricity generation, Transport and Industry) in four countries
including China
, America, Japan and Australia according to
a report which went back to 2012.
Looking at the overall
perspective, it is apparent that China
accounted for the highest level
of produced air pollution
by far compared to other countries
. Moreover
, both America and China
comprised a significant level
of pollution
of the total reported level
.
With regard to Electricity generation, this
source generated just below 60 PPM
of pollution
in China
, whereas
this
amount was between 15 PPM
and 30 PPM
in other countries
. Moreover
, Transport accounted for a considerable amount of 70 PPM
and nearly 60 PPM
in China
and America, respectively, as opposed to Japan and Australia at 30 PPM
and 20 PPM
.
Although
China
generated the highest level
of pollution
(80 PPM
) through the industry segment among other countries
, neither of the other countries
released more than 45 PPM
which belongs to Japan.Submitted by hamidreza.rezaei21 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pollution, countries, china, level, ppm with synonyms.
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