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The use of social media, e.g. Facebook and Twitter, is replacing face-to-face contact for many people in everyday life. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, because of
the
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contemporary technology, social
media
such
 as Facebook and Twitter
plays
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 a crucial part
of
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 our daily lives.
However
, some argue these online
communicating
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 applications influence the way how humans do social
activity
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activities
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. In the following paragraphs, the content will outline the benefits and drawbacks of
this
 ongoing development.
Firstly
, social
media
 is not a suitable place to make friends.
People
 enjoy communicating applications because of their convenience and numerous
contactors
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who
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 they can talk to.
Nevertheless
,
people
 could hide their information on the Internet,
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 a result, it would be difficult to find a friend online, sometimes, they might even encounter online
frauds
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.
In contrast
,
people
 who lived in the past used to communicate in person,
as a result
, the connection between each other
are
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 strong and unbreakable, they will have more emotional interaction and will have closer relationships.
People
 needed plenty of time to receive
the
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foreign messages,
therefore
,
people
 lost connection when they went abroad in the past.
However
,
communicating
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 technology offers a fast and cheap solution for
this
 situation.
For instance
, as
a
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 international
students
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student
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, I can make phone calls and send messages to my family
everyday
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,
in addition
, my family members can find my daily experience on my Facebook and Instagram pages.
This
reduce
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 my
homesick
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 and
the
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anxiety
from
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 my parents. In conclusion, social
media
 has some insecure issues when
people
 hide their information on the Internet,
however
, there is no doubt that social
media
 provides us
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better experience of communication.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • self-expression
  • creativity
  • information
  • perspectives
  • maintain
  • genuine
  • miscommunication
  • misunderstandings
  • mental health
  • well-being
  • addiction
  • excessive screen time
  • privacy concerns
  • online security risks
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