IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

The table give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in london and sydney during the same weekend in december 2018.

The table give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in london and sydney during the same weekend in december 2018.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The charts illustrate data about the
degrees
Use synonyms
 and
hours
Use synonyms
 of daylight in London and
Sydney
Use synonyms
 within the same days in December 2018.
Overall
Linking Words
, it can be seen that the sun stayed out longer in
Sydney
Use synonyms
,
while
Linking Words
 the average temperatures in London were lower.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, the minimum
degrees
Use synonyms
 in London
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
show examples
 only around 5 Celcius, and the maximum was approximately 10 Celcius, it was pretty freezing.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, it was warmer in
Sydney
Use synonyms
 with the lowest degree being 17 to 19
degrees
Use synonyms
, and the highest being more or less 30
degrees
Use synonyms
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, in
Sydney
Use synonyms
, the
hours
Use synonyms
 of sunrise remained stable at 05.45, except on Sunday the 30th, set at 20.07 except on Friday the 28th which at 20.06.
Consequently
Linking Words
, the daytime was more than 12
hours
Use synonyms
 which was almost 15
hours
Use synonyms
.
However
Linking Words
, in the other city, the sun was rising at 08.06 from Saturday to Sunday, and at 08.05 on Friday, afterwards the nightfall nearly at 4 PM.
Thus
Linking Words
, the duration of daytime is roughly 8
hours
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words degrees, hours, sydney with synonyms.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: