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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart provides information about how many people from Asian countries lived in cities between 1970 and 2020,
as well as
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 the predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, the percentage of the
population
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 saw an upward trend in four different countries. Notably, the Indonesian people were the lowest in 1970, but it is predicted to be the second most populated country in 2040. To commence with, the Philippines has the highest number of
population
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 at just over 30% in 1970, followed by Malaysia at exactly 30%. The former fluctuated throughout the periods, and it will have peaked at around 52% in 2040.
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, the latter rose gradually and will have commanded the most populated city at more than 80% in 2040.
Furthermore
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, as regards Thailand, it begins below 20% as the third highest
population
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 in 1970.
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, it is forecasted to be the lowest one in 2040, even if it will witness a significant rise. Meanwhile, the
population
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 in Indonesia was only approximately 12%, but it climbed to around 50% in 2020 and will continue to increase to reach its top at more than 60%, making it the second-highest
population
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.
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