The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The  diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
The map diagram illustrates the public
library
floor plan over two decades compared to the present day.
Overall
, noticeable features that the
library
has
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changed
significantly more
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,
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and
adding some facilities.
Firstly
, the CDs, videos and games
room
has been expanded, which form to story events and child’s fiction books with sofa in the corner and next to the door. Next to the entrance on the left, before
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the reading
room
, and now replaced with the computer space.
Additionally
, the
room
, which is the
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book,
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now the lecture
room
.Adult fiction books have been relocated to the other side of the
library
, making
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for all the contemporary reference books. On the right side of the entrance, making
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for the cafe area. And the tables and chairs which were previously in the middle of the map have been removed. On the right side of the
library
, an information desk and some self-service machines have been erected.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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