The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

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The map diagram illustrates the public

library

floor plan over two decades compared to the present day.

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, noticeable features that the

library

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changed

significantly more

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modernists

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ans

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and

adding some facilities.

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, the CDs, videos and games

room

has been expanded, which form to story events and child’s fiction books with sofa in the corner and next to the door. Next to the entrance on the left, before

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the reading

room

, and now replaced with the computer space.

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, the

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, which is the

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book,

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now the lecture

room

.Adult fiction books have been relocated to the other side of the

library

, making

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for all the contemporary reference books. On the right side of the entrance, making

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for the cafe area. And the tables and chairs which were previously in the middle of the map have been removed. On the right side of the

library

, an information desk and some self-service machines have been erected.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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2Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

floor plan
layout
shelving
reading area
reference section
encyclopedias
dictionaries
circulation desk
transactions
digital media
computer stations
multimedia rooms
café area
social environment
leisure-friendly
expanded reading areas
user experience
comfortable seating
children's section
engage younger readers

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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Some people think that it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages? You should write at least 250 words.

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