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The table give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in london and sydney during the same weekend in december 2018.

The table give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in london and sydney during the same weekend in december 2018.
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The table compares the temperatures, and hours of daylight between
Sydney
 and
London
 in December 2018.
Overall
, it is clearly apparent that
London
 has
lower
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a lower
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temperature
 and
shorter
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a shorter
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 time getting
sun light
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sunlight
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compares
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compared
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 to
Sydney
 at the same period of time. Turning to the details,
firstly
 from 28th until 30th December the
temperature
 in
London
 was always below 15
degree
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degrees
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celcius
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celsius
. The hottest is
in
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on
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 Saturday 29th at 13
degree
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degrees
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 but it
also
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is also
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 the coldest at night. The hours of
sun light
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sunlight
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 that
London
get
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gets
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had
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have
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 not changed dramatically,
its
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it's
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 about 8 hours per day. On
contrary
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, in a city called
Sydney
, the
temperature
 was higher. In three days,
start
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starting
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 from 28th to 30th December the
temperature
 was always above 25
degree
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degrees
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celcius
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celsius
. It peaked two days before the end of the month at 31
degree
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degrees
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celcius
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celsius
,
whereas
 the lowest
temperature
 was
in
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on
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 Friday 28th at 17
degree
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degrees
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celcius
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celsius
. In
Sydney
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Sydney,
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 the sun rises at quarter to six and
end
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ends
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 at about twenty past seven. which
resulting
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results in
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 longer
hour
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hours
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 of daylight.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sydney, london, temperature, degree, celcius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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