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The table give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in london and sydney during the same weekend in december 2018.

The table give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in london and sydney during the same weekend in december 2018.
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The table compares the temperatures, and hours of daylight between
Sydney
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 and
London
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 in December 2018.
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, it is clearly apparent that
London
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 has
lower
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a lower
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temperature
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 and
shorter
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a shorter
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 time getting
sun light
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sunlight
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compares
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 to
Sydney
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 at the same period of time. Turning to the details,
firstly
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 from 28th until 30th December the
temperature
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 in
London
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 was always below 15
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degree
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degrees
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celcius
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celsius
. The hottest is
in
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on
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 Saturday 29th at 13
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degree
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degrees
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 but it
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also
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 the coldest at night. The hours of
sun light
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sunlight
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 that
London
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get
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gets
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had
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have
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 not changed dramatically,
its
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it's
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 about 8 hours per day. On
contrary
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, in a city called
Sydney
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, the
temperature
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 was higher. In three days,
start
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starting
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 from 28th to 30th December the
temperature
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 was always above 25
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degree
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degrees
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celcius
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celsius
. It peaked two days before the end of the month at 31
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degree
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degrees
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celcius
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celsius
,
whereas
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 the lowest
temperature
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 was
in
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on
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 Friday 28th at 17
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degree
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degrees
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celcius
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celsius
. In
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Sydney
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Sydney,
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 the sun rises at quarter to six and
end
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ends
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 at about twenty past seven. which
resulting
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results in
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 longer
hour
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hours
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 of daylight.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sydney, london, temperature, degree, celcius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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