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The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.
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The line graph gives information about
the
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how aged people spent their leisure
time
 from 1980 to 2010 in the United States.
Overall
, it can be seen that the most popular activity was watching
tv
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 at the beginning,
however
elderly
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the elderly
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 spent more
time
to
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the
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hiking
at the
end
 of the period. In 1980 60% of people spent their free
time
to
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the
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watching
tv
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. Following
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 20 years it gradually rose to 70% and
at the
end
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 it fell
down
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to 10% again. Surfing the internet was the
last
 popular activity at the beginning,
whitch
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which
 started at approximately
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5%. It significantly increased to 15%
until
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 2000 and sharply rose to 50% in 2010.
Time
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spent
for
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 theatre stood at 50% in 1980 ,
whitch
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which
 was 20% more than reading at
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time
. Next 20 years
proportion
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the proportion
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 of theatre fluctuated and it
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slightly
 fell to 45%
at the
end
.
In contrast
,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of reading rose
double
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 in 2010.
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The Elderly
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Elderly
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The elderly
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 spent 20% of their free
time
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for
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hiking in 1980 and it steeply rocketed up to 80%
at the
end
 of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, end with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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